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    dots Submission Name: Attacked by Pagesdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I read this to magnicat on the the phone the other night, and she liked it, so I'm dedicating it to her.

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    dotsAttacked by Pagesdots

    The pages attacked me,
    thousands of them,
    bitter from being scarred by my words
    crawling over me like snakes,
    riddling my body with paper cuts,
    but I heroically hacked them to bits
    with a letter opener...
    I wake up
    my face on a pile of poems,
    pen in hand.
    Feeling, if only in dreams, like a master of words.

    Submitted on 2004-10-10 02:21:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting dream... I never had one like this.
    you stayed with the beginning image. very well done. I think I wouldn't have thought of a letter opener and just would have "taken" something else. your descriptions are very vivd, especially the paper cuts. very well done, Amy. great poem.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow Amy.. very interesting images.. i love the way you carry the motif through.. the pages and pens and letter openers...
    and the line
    'Riddling my body with paper cuts'
    is so vivid.. makes your cringe..

    i have so much to catch up on with your work.. dont worry.. i wont flood you with a ton of comments in one go
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey! I'm back from my trip and checked your latest piece, this one. I must say I've missed your poems over this short time away. LOL I believe most every poet can relate to this. I read it aloud which helped me understand it, plus it was fun that way. I like the ending the best. You feel proud, a master, a true poet. Which, in this poem you showed us, that you really are one. I hate giving only good comments to you but I don't see how I could say anything negative about your pieces. Great job. :)
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm so glad you posted this! i loved it when you read it to me on the phone the other night. it reminded me a little of Edward Scissorhands, just going to town on those poems! you are a master of words!
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. It seems to touch everyone in a generic way, but your personal experience shines through in every way. What can I say except keep up the good work, and I'm sure whatever you feel is missing will be found.

    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of nights of binge drinking then coming home alone and writing for hours while I try to sober up. Then in the morning I wake up with 4 or 5 rather obscure poems that I didn't even know I wrote. You know somebody said that this poem was funny, but I really don't think it is. I think that it is alot deeper than is blatently apparent. I get the sense that sometimes you fight between yourself and your writing trying to get out what you feel. But that might just be the alcohol talking, it was homecoming tonight at my college and I am pretty wasted. good write reguardless of what it means.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by Matthew Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      Probably something many poets can relate too . . .
    You used personification well, which gave the poem life and vibrance.
    Short and sweet, I like it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by Leila | [ Reply to This ]
      By break it up into stanzas, i was referring to the end. It might be even more effective separated from the rest of the poem by a couple line breaks.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by whiteknight | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL, excellent. Cute ending. Break it up into stanzas though, rethink the punctuation, perhaps slide some more emotive imagery in there and you're on to a winner.
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by whiteknight | [ Reply to This ]

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