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    dots Submission Name: Traveldots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 831
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 773



    Description:
       Doug gets to travel a lot since his dad works for the newspaper. he says he wants to take me everywhere he's been. *sigh*


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    Take me somewhere
    new...
    Take me everywhere
    you've been
    to the places my eyes
    have never seen
    but my heart
    has dreamed
    to write about.

    Take me away
    to a far off place
    with rolling hills
    and where you can
    see the horizon for miles and miles
    that never seem to end.

    Take me some place
    magical and mysterious
    where, at night,
    you can look up
    and see more stars
    then your mind can fathom.

    Take me to your world,
    I want to see everything
    you've seen
    to know what you know.
    I want to travel to where
    you have been;
    I want to be there
    with you.




    Submitted on 2004-10-10 20:36:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed this poem greatly. I want to see what you see, that hits a cord in my heart. The longing to want to see the places someone you hold dear to your heart is clear in this poem. I don't have any suggestions to make it better. This is very good. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, seems sort of like a song... The descriptions sound beautiful. I personally love traveling and one of my goals is to see as much of the world as I can (and on my budget that won't be much), but anyway this is sweet.
    P.S. I swear I heard a song like this somewhere...
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by Delirium | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so cute.
    It gives so much imagery and makes me tingle. It reminds me of summer, when I go camping and the crazy amounts of stars that are everywhere. It feels like Im a million miles away from anything important.
    Its so amazing. I cant even describe it.
    Anyways. Your poem brought back all my adventures from travelling in Europe, camping, etc.
    I love it.
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]


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