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Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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She was cast aside once, forgotten, and she set her mind on never being wanted. She thinks that she's not good enough. And she's too scared to get into a relationship with anyone else because she tinks that she'll be hurt again. It's rather bittersweet if I do say so myself.


Here alone
On this shelf
Put away
By someone
Always needing
To let go
Never wanting
You to know
I am just
This girl
In this
Nonsense world
Here alone
On this shelf
By someone
And I’ve cried
Too many
To let you
See me now
All alone
On this shelf
Put away by someone
Never wanting
You to see
Just assuming
That you’d be
As unhappy
Here with me
Don’t remove
From this shelf
Put away by someone
I’ve been hurt
But not
By you
If you care
Than please leave
I will stay
Here by myself
All alone
Upon this shelf
Put away
By someone

Submitted on 2004-10-10 22:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I guess I've never felt this way. But I can only imagine though others pain what it must feel like. Please don't let one persons let down prevent you from finding the right one for you. I am 28 and have left many men in tears yet they seem to all have eventually bounced back and found their true love. People go through many lovers and many friends to find their tru matches!
| Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by aldergrovegal | [ Reply to This ]
  Good job getting across what you were trying to say. I just want to hug her and introduce to some great friends I know. Poor thing. No one should ever feel that way. I felt her helplessness and pain. Awww... Nobody should be left on the shelf. Very good piece...
| Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
  You captured the pain and hurt of being alone. And kind of being tossed aside by life. I loved it. So much feeling. Keep writing
| Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved this. I know how it feels to be alone. It made me think about how some people sort of get left "On a shelf". Personally, I wouldn't change or add anything to this piece. It made a good point and I believe more people should think about those people that are "left on a shelf". Good Job!
| Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by BlackAsh | [ Reply to This ]

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