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    dots Submission Name: discardeddots
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    Author: Scribbles1338
    ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169/167/37
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 984



    Description:
       She was cast aside once, forgotten, and she set her mind on never being wanted. She thinks that she's not good enough. And she's too scared to get into a relationship with anyone else because she tinks that she'll be hurt again. It's rather bittersweet if I do say so myself.


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    Here alone
    On this shelf
    Put away
    By someone
    Else
    Always needing
    To let go
    Never wanting
    You to know
    Me
    I am just
    This girl
    In this
    Nonsense world
    Here alone
    On this shelf
    Discarded
    By someone
    Else
    And Iíve cried
    Too many
    Times
    To let you
    See me now
    All alone
    On this shelf
    Put away by someone
    Else
    Never wanting
    You to see
    Just assuming
    That youíd be
    As unhappy
    Here with me
    Donít remove
    Me
    From this shelf
    Put away by someone
    Else
    Iíve been hurt
    But not
    By you
    If you care
    Than please leave
    Too
    I will stay
    Here by myself
    All alone
    Upon this shelf
    Put away
    By someone
    else








    Submitted on 2004-10-10 22:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I guess I've never felt this way. But I can only imagine though others pain what it must feel like. Please don't let one persons let down prevent you from finding the right one for you. I am 28 and have left many men in tears yet they seem to all have eventually bounced back and found their true love. People go through many lovers and many friends to find their tru matches!
    aldergrovegal
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by aldergrovegal | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job getting across what you were trying to say. I just want to hug her and introduce to some great friends I know. Poor thing. No one should ever feel that way. I felt her helplessness and pain. Awww... Nobody should be left on the shelf. Very good piece...
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
      You captured the pain and hurt of being alone. And kind of being tossed aside by life. I loved it. So much feeling. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. I know how it feels to be alone. It made me think about how some people sort of get left "On a shelf". Personally, I wouldn't change or add anything to this piece. It made a good point and I believe more people should think about those people that are "left on a shelf". Good Job!
    | Posted on 2004-10-10 00:00:00 | by BlackAsh | [ Reply to This ]


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