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Mending Your Wounds


Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I wrote this for someone very dear to me....


Mending Your Wounds



It gets darker everyday,
Knowing you're not here.
Soon enough i'll mend your wounds,
And you'll fly again, my dear....
I would give up anything-
To take back the pain of her.
If i knew the answer,
I would rush to you with the cure.
I know this is sudden,
A shock for me as well.
Uncanny; this connection
And this unrelenting spell.




Submitted on 2004-03-04 17:34:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yet again, as u've heard from everyone else, nice job. Also, along with what love gone wrong said, Who is this guy? I'm rooting for him getting back to normal.
| Posted on 2004-03-04 00:00:00 | by dgnofdarkness | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with all else - brilliant job. You've been doing many nice pieces.
| Posted on 2004-03-04 00:00:00 | by Eggman | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very pretty and nicely written. I don't have any complaints.
| Posted on 2004-03-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  absolutely love the last two lines. your writing has come so far in the last few weeks, who the hell is this guy?!
| Posted on 2004-03-04 00:00:00 | by love gone wrong | [ Reply to This ]


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