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    dots Submission Name: These Pills Kill My Souldots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is about my experiences with antidepressants. They really did me no good (other than making me sleep twenty hours per day), but if they help you, continue taking them.


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    dotsThese Pills Kill My Souldots
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    I wish I could kill the demon inside me,
    but these pills kill my soul,
    and leave me a shell
    with no thought of my own,
    a numb mind, numb skin,
    the urge to sleep without dreams
    and fear to the depths of my being.
    With them, I am no longer me.
    Maybe sad is what I am:
    What I'm supposed to be.






    Submitted on 2004-03-04 18:04:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm... been there done that. The nice thing about being a doctor's kid is I know where to look and who to ask for the real dirt on drugs. This was well written, and very real. I hurt, but at least I know I'm alive. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      I totally related to the work. I thought it ended a little prematurely (maybe because of the connection). My experience with Prozac was it made me feel nothing. I felt like an empty shell. I'll take the highs and lows any day rather than feeling like a void. Good work.
    | Posted on 2004-03-19 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i want to read more. it ended too quickly. i can totally relate to the pill killing the soul and numbing the mind, having been there myself. i would suggest perhaps expounding on it more, although i can imagine it may be an area that you would might want to move on from! thanks!
    | Posted on 2004-03-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh very nice... excellent description and word choices... you nailed it.. not one of those writes someone can pull off if they havent experienced that... the doctors brainwash us with these pills... better to make us sleep than face reality..... nice work... (tossed the pills a long time ago)
    | Posted on 2004-03-05 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, i think it kinda relates to socety in a way. the lines all flow nicely into the next one, until the end comes when it leaves u with a great message.. great work.. keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-03-04 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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