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    dots Submission Name: breathing adaydots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsbreathing adaydots
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    Debre` lurks within me.
    Holding an umbrella up high,
    to take cover.
    Acid flying down
    tunneling its way right
    threw my cold,
    and shivering
    intakes.




    Submitted on 2004-10-11 11:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      interesting write. It is short, but strait to the point. And it seems dark and/ or depressive. maybe if you would regulate the stanzas it would help the flow of the poem. Well anyways great write!
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by nj | [ Reply to This ]
      uhm...dont know what to say about this one either...again, a few fragments that could be made better...dont grasp the conept of this one either...maybe I should just quite while Im ahead???

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    | Posted on 2004-10-19 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]


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