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Torn Away

Author: winged_writer_robyn
ASL Info:    16/f/wa
Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116 /162 /44
Words: 174
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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mom and i fought today....for the last time. for all you guys, i'm getting the f**k out of here. i love doug dearly, but i can't stand hurting like this at home. all i need is my brother's concent, then i can leave. i might try to stay together with doug, but there's a lot of distance between washington and ohio. for those that are christians, keep me in your prayers. thanks

Torn Away

the fighting between
you and me
You heard me:
I'm leaving
out that door
as soon as I buy
the plane ticket
This...This HELLHOLE
isn't HOME
there is no unity here;
"family" is not a familiar word
in this cursed house.
I'm leaving
to Ohio
to live
with Roy...
I don't care
what you say.
Hell, I'd leave today
if i had thought of it
This has become
too much to handle;
I'm tired of turning
to a blade
every time my heart bleeds.
Soon that blade
will inch up
against the pulsing vein
because I'm sick and tired
of the pain.
You caused this.
You've torn me away
from the one good thing
in my life.
The only thing I actually love;
That loves me back.
You don't love me.
You wouldn't put me through this
if you did.
So now
I'm being torn away
from life itself
because you refuse
to let me live.

Submitted on 2004-10-11 19:26:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this. . . your short, choppy lines (which really aren't choppy at all) really got the point across to me. The interesting rhyme-scheme really caught my eye. . . made me think of my favorite poem that I ever wrote, which I need to post. I'm really sorry about your mother and you, I'll keep both of you in my prayers. The seventeenth line I would change to:
"family" is an unfamiliar word
That's basically it. Good write.
| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
  Isn't it funny funny how ignorant people can be at times? When leaving simply, doesn't appear to be the wisest way out,instaed they stick around to fight another round, just to cry even harder th next time you get knocked out. But you got it! You left that intolerable fool,didn't ya'?Good for!-vlad09
| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]
  i can tell that this was formed from pure anger even hate.. sigh.. it leads me to believe that you are blinded by it at the moment.. i can say little because i don't know what to say really.. just i hope things work out for you.. i feel sorry for doug though.. two people who love each other shouldn't be kept apart.. well all the best.. never know what the dawn brings..
| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]

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