It's not a choice....

Author: winged_writer_robyn ASL Info:    16/f/wa Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116 /162 /44 Words: 82

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It's not a choice....

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It's not a choice... It's what's best... if I don't go there won't be anything left of me. It's not a choice... It's what's right... if I don't leave now I'll be fighting for my life forever. It's not a choice... It's what I must do... If I don't leave now I might never again be able to say How much I love you. It's not a choice... It's a decision that is out of my hands....

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Eh, I can sort of relate to it. But it really leaves me wondering what you have to do, which is good I suppose. I re-read it a couple tiems and still didn't know what your choice really was. It could be many things, not just relationship. I could come back to this poem whenever I have a choice to make. Good Job!

| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by BlackAsh | [ Reply to This ]

I just read "torn away" so that I would understand this one better. . . but I'm still not sure who Doug is, so if you could clear that up for me? Anyhoo, I wouldn't change anything except for to say, on the fourth line of the second stanza, rephrase it to this. . . I'llhave to fight for my life Or something along those lines, anyway. Good write! -Secret

| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]

I'll be fight for my life I didn't understand this line, but I did like the overall message, and I look forward to reading more of your work, keep writing it's obvious you are quite talented...Bob:)

| Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]

definitely like it. it's vague and keeps the reader wondering what you're writing about. your word use is nice too, soft in a way, i really enjoyed it.

| Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by kair | [ Reply to This ]

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