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    dots Submission Name: It's not a choice....dots

    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       I have my apology prepared for doug. i just e-maild him the news....(if you don't know, read "torn away")

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    dotsIt's not a choice....dots

    It's not a choice...
    It's what's best...
    if I don't go
    there won't be anything left
    of me.

    It's not a choice...
    It's what's right...
    if I don't leave now
    I'll be fighting for my life

    It's not a choice...
    It's what I must do...
    If I don't leave now
    I might never again
    be able to say
    How much I love you.

    It's not a choice...
    It's a decision that
    is out of my hands....

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      Eh, I can sort of relate to it. But it really leaves me wondering what you have to do, which is good I suppose. I re-read it a couple tiems and still didn't know what your choice really was. It could be many things, not just relationship. I could come back to this poem whenever I have a choice to make. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by BlackAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      I just read "torn away" so that I would understand this one better. . . but I'm still not sure who Doug is, so if you could clear that up for me? Anyhoo, I wouldn't change anything except for to say, on the fourth line of the second stanza, rephrase it to this. . .
    I'llhave to fight for my life
    Or something along those lines, anyway. Good write!
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll be fight for my life

    I didn't understand this line, but I did like the overall message, and I look forward to reading more of your work, keep writing it's obvious you are quite talented...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-11 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      definitely like it. it's vague and keeps the reader wondering what you're writing about. your word use is nice too, soft in a way, i really enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by kair | [ Reply to This ]

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