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    dots Submission Name: death bed's reasondots
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    Author: doom_gloomgirl
    ASL Info:    -222/f/the pit of hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 60/62/21
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1064
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 423



    Description:
       this poem this sort of about gossiping but the rest u can figure out.


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    dotsdeath bed's reasondots
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    I want to die;
    I'm terridied
    I'm tempted to
    my dislikes
    If I could only
    see the light.

    I feel uncapable
    of going on.
    All of you think
    you should listen on.
    Did I not tell
    you not to whisper?

    This is causing me
    to whimper.
    I didn't want
    that to be known.
    Now my faith is gone




    Submitted on 2004-10-12 11:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good poem, great explaination of feelings, I am not sure what kind of comment you are looking for, but if you want some more feed back I would be willing too
    hang in there
    kaity
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
      this is by far my most favorite poem i have written i see that i made a mistake in spelling i remember why i wrote it too
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by doom_gloomgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      terridied=terrified. but I hope you don't really feel this way, It's sad, and not a great place to be I was once there too, but there is hope and if you need a friend, to talk to I can be there to listen.

    lost and alone.
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]


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