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    dots Submission Name: rage against my thoughtsdots
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    Author: doom_gloomgirl
    ASL Info:    -222/f/the pit of hell
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 60/62/21
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 995
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 563



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    dotsrage against my thoughtsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    They think they know
    but only if...
    they did
    Constant torture
    is what I feel
    Ongoing battles
    against...
    my rage
    You know nothing
    no matter what you
    may think
    You’re insolence blinds you
    so you can not see
    what I lay directly
    in front of you.
    You’re deaf to what
    I have to say.
    But none of you
    will ever know
    what
    I
    feel
    I
    feel
    pain





    Submitted on 2004-10-12 11:34:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can relate to this piece, it's how I feel about life, it really is. I liked your little imput there, that you didn't want it to make much sense. That's how most of my poems are. It does make a person think, but, in the end it really doesn't make sense and too many things are better off left that way.
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      thank u it does make more sense if i put "if only you" but i didnt want it to make sense though and i wrote this while i was in the dark
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by doom_gloomgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it makes more sense as "if only you..." other than that I can't understand why it's got no comments...it flows well and while it doesn't thrill my senses, it entertains and is thought provoking.
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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