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    dots Submission Name: A dancerdots
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    Author: Vibrant
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    Words: 27
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    dotsA dancerdots
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    lt is clear, that l am a dancer
    who is so dear.
    What can l say besides-
    hold me,
    and lead me away
    to never never land.




    Submitted on 2004-10-12 12:36:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a dancer huh...well this piece had strong feeling to it and moved nicely...never never land?...why not
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the title, basically because I am a dancer too. I think you could do more with this. Describe the dancing between you and the person (or if there isn't another person). Lead you away to never never land is a good line but you need to put more before that line. You have the buns just put some meat in there. :) Good luck.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]


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