Description: A poem that's a part of a story i'm working on. Commentary Sought= Unbiased review, first impressions, writing advice, thoughts, ideas, and whatever else you feel like saying...just not "it's great, woohoo". gracias
Muse -------------------------------------------
Forget your worry and your woes
Forget your friends, family, and foes
They do not matter. It is we
The muses, elves, and the fairy
Who give up everything to you
We do not care if it is just
We don't complain because we must
It is our duty to inspire
We do not bother to conspire
Against one or another of all thee
We slave away for your sake only
You do not care if we are lonely
Or that we wish for a place to stay
A place to pause from our weary way
You just demand the inspiration
Without a single word of thanks
And yet we do not play the pranks
You so believe we're meant to do
The ones I wish I could with you
For then you'd notice me
The muse that stands beside your chair
You never think if I am there
Except when ideas do not flow
And then you wallow in your woe
And blame poor innocents like I
Now read these words
Make my voice heard
I must not give you any dreams
I must just leave you to your whims
Yet you blame me.
You cannot see till I will it so
But the fates wont let you go
On believing not in us
Who guide you still without a fuss
And so your eyes will clear
it's great wooh...wait..darn. Just kidding though. I had to read this twice before i could sorta understand it but thats just me. It's good that you wrote this because (sorry Jimmy) i can relate. Not usually but at this exact moment i can. I've kind of got writers block and thats almost what youre talking about. But im digressing. The poem overall is very good. I'm interested as to your inspiration for writing this. But maybe it was your muse. There's this one line i don't think makes sense. "We don't complain because we must" You might have a reason for that but i couldn't pick it up while reading through. If you've ever seen the phantom of the opera this sort of reminds me of that (it's a compliment). The show centers around this angel of music that's sort of like the muse you're talking here. You've got me hooked. Maybe the next installment will make more sense to my simple mind. This was good I enjoyed reading it.
i like the first part of the poem much more than the second for some reason this poem has a sense of reality even though it plainly states elves fearies and such but everyone has a muse to look for and we do not tend to be very appreciative of it
and when i said second installment i meant the other parts of the story. I don't know if you were planning to do that. It would be cool but if you don't thats ok too
Submission Name: Muse
