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    dots Submission Name: The Prison of Fantasydots
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    Author: Damien Vladimir
    ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122/89/35
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1132
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1235



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    dotsThe Prison of Fantasydots
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    The prison of fantasy, fantasy
    is brain asking sharply for meth, and amphetamines
    a train of a cargo so heavy,offtrack leaves reality

    Celebrity tendencies eating me
    i've dreamed of this day since the torturing
    the agony, MTV came to be
    but now i see, not the t.v.

    Attention,
    a lesson
    a drug acceptance
    Deception,
    i question
    my fathers teachings..

    which is,
    the prison of fantasy, fantasy
    a prison designed by me, yes for me
    the reason was my t.v., following
    the dream of my wicked desire to leave this reality

    It's alive!
    a lie,
    sublime and blinds
    i've come to find with crystal eyes
    the truth that lies , it's the grime grisaille

    It's the,
    the prison of fantasy, fantasy
    a prison designed by me, yes for me
    the reason was my t.v., following
    the dream of my wicked desire to leave this reality

    the prison of fantasy, i can't leave
    the key of my freedom was lost at sea
    the face that i have shall belong and be...
    in MTV,your t.v., history!




    Submitted on 2004-10-12 19:09:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to this as an observation. Its sad and its common.
    | Posted on 2015-08-31 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that poem was very intresting i think that you basically described todays youth but the only thing i didnt like about it was i couldnt find any visual words which are always great to have in poems because it creates a new world window that they can view for themselves.
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by doom_gloomgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm assuming you've got the melody to go with this since its such a complete job. Depressed lyrics are not my thing but youve got a nice cohesive piece here. There's enough structure that it hints of it's tune and rythm. I liked the turn of the chorus at the end ( I use it a lot myself)
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-10-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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