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    dots Submission Name: a love, is warndots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsa love, is warndots
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    l often wonder, what you are
    wondering, about me.
    l often think, about what you,
    maybe, thinking about...me.
    l inhale your beauty
    l'm fond for your love song
    Longing feels like, a life's storm.




    Submitted on 2004-10-13 10:01:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it had no impact onm me because of all the poems that i've been reading.might there be a spelling error in the title?it seemed to me that it was a social and positive little poem.i wish that i could say more but you have already received many other comments so i'll just leave it at that for now.good luck and fare well.
    | Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that because this is put so simply, it gets to reader vey well and the message is definately clear. I can also relate and I read this with a kind of stutter in it, like it was in some way unprepared, and that situs the genre perfectly in my view. Good write.
    | Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      I admire the word economy of this poem. I don't quite get why all the commas are there though.? ... (sorry i had to maek it long enough for them to allow me to post it.)

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    | Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by HaAtzmah | [ Reply to This ]
      I love poems that say a lot with a few words. Sometimes I find that my attention span won't last through a really long poem.(darn my ADHD) But I must say, that you do a wonderful job. It takes some skill to write something that still makes sense and captures a feeling completly without writing a poem that is a half a page long. Great job.
    | Posted on 2004-10-31 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]


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