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    dots Submission Name: Walking Stickdots
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    Author: Josh
    ASL Info:    17/nh
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 276/226/30
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 368
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1442



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       After spending a weekend in paradise, it was fitting to write about some of the stuff i thought about. No very good, but writing when you are relaxed makes everything sound good in your head.


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    Where does one find the time, i think
    My hair rests on my hands
    folded gently behind my head,
    for the rocky ledge below me is, to say the least
    unforgiving.
    Or is it?
    I sit up and place the walking stick
    of my journey, horizontally in front of my
    crossed, and weary legs.
    My head is immediatly rushed with oxygen
    deprived blood, but no longer do i care, for my head is so clear
    Touched by these familiar ghosts of my first and only love, i cringe in my own
    My wandering and trained eyes look to the horizon, only to be blocked by the view of
    many opposing and humbling mounds of energy
    and rock.
    Soon these eyes, no longer able to contain
    introduce themselves to my heart, and they cry in joy.
    These mountains are my home, and where I hide from and confront my doubts.
    But if only i had you.
    Nature gives you gifts, so nature can take away
    How small one seems, as your vapors blow
    in the crossbreeze on a cliffs edge.
    Leaving yourself cool and refreshed,
    as if being in the comforting arms of one who truly loves and understands, i come back to you.
    Never leave me astray, change my mind as quickly and often as the New England sky, May the wind blow my new found self-lessness in new directions, and may i find happiness, and hopefully you,
    wherever i may land.




    Submitted on 2004-10-13 14:44:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is quite interesting, the words create a soothing image, but I couldn't -somehow- find or understand the real outline, I just liked the way it is. I have one comment about something you said, Nature doesn't give or take anything, only God gives and takes..remeber that!
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by Beast | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well put together. Nothing I would change about it. It was a really great piece and very well put together. keep up the good work. I will keep reading your stuff for sure.
    | Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. as a girl, i don't have most guys that can say what theyre feeling like this. i think it is awesome that you can. i liked the word usage and i loved how you were just talking about natural highs.
    | Posted on 2004-10-13 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      New England-ness! Woot. I live in Ct. Love this one too, you've got to be a genius or something. I used to write free verse and gave up when no one got it. You risk your mental and physical health, putting yourself on the cliff, out there with the faith that nature, the hugging winds, the carressing spray won't lead you astray. Love it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-17 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why you would say this is not very good. It is beautiful, calming, and somewhat sad. You really have a way with words.
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by ber | [ Reply to This ]



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