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    dots Submission Name: Definition of a Poetdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDefinition of a Poetdots

    A surgeon who dissects life
    to find the ironies,
    The buried prettiness,
    to extract the injustice,
    the obvious ugliness,
    and reassembles the beast
    caring more for aesthetics
    than proper order.

    Submitted on 2004-10-14 06:29:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought for quite long if I like it that you started almost very line with 't'. a very big anaphora (hope I got the right stylistic devise here, I know perfectly how you call it in German but English?) here. but I came to the conclusion that I like it. really good poem here.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Just like a surgeon to not care about the proper order of words and prettiness! LoL I think this piece is very cute. I love the ending about how he doesn't care which order the words go in. Hehe Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      I reckon you're on to a winner here. You're very easy to read and use the space to so that we're examining ourselves as we read. Now that's one ugly beast! I'd only change hidden beauties because that phrase has no tread left on it. otherwise it's a cracker!
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      While I wouldn't say we're so precise and exacting as to be true medical professions, the description almost reminds me of the dead poet's society and their vow to "suck the marrow out of life." And that, I can relate to. Any poet would be proud to be put under your description-it's a pity I'm more of a rambler m'self.

    On a side note: You look a LOT better in this picture. I take back my (long forgotten, I hope?) assertion that your appearance was homely. I see what your hubby sees in you now, and he's got a good eye.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by EternitysLyre | [ Reply to This ]
      how we do twist things around. although i don;t totally agree with your premise. sometimes a poet takes all the prettiness in the world and extracts it out to highlight the ugliness and injustice!

    kind of makes me want to write an ugly poem! LOL!
    | Posted on 2004-10-16 00:00:00 | by jdinning67 | [ Reply to This ]

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