I like it alot! I think the simplicity just added so much more feeling! It wasn't too choppy or plain. I thought it was something so beautiful that you don't need it to be a 200 word poem to be expressed. Great write and welcome to the site! Cant wait to see more of ur work
I've read all five selections listed and "Love" is a very over written subject when it comes to broken hearts. Everyone has been there, done that in every teenager ever born. However, one can still relate so that still makes the subject relevant. I have always pondered the idea of how lovers conquer this defeated feeling instead of letting it conquer them! Seldom do you read from that point of view, and that always intriqued me. Well, this was a very nicely written flow in all cases, so your potential as a writer just surprize many people, including you! Have a good time in your writing, see you later on the board.