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    dots Submission Name: Perfection in my eyesdots
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    Author: Star_searcher
    ASL Info:    17/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 114/109/20
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1263
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 478



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       I wrote this for an ex-boyfriend, guess it doesn't really mean anything now but it did at the time.


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    dotsPerfection in my eyesdots
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    All I wanted was to be part of your heart,
    For us to be together, to never be apart.

    No one else in this world can even compare,
    You are so perfect, and so is this love that we share.

    We have so much more than I ever thought we would,
    I love you much more than I ever thought I could.

    I hope that one day you'll come to realise,
    How perfect you are when seen through my eyes.






    Submitted on 2004-10-14 17:38:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that you really were in love when you wrote this. (maybe even still are) This is sweet. You gave compassion, and just blurted out everything in a very short way. I am glad to read your work.
    | Posted on 2004-11-24 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it too! as per the 1st comment below... this poen says that you love this person, leaving "why" you do for another write! keep going! Denny
    | Posted on 2004-10-15 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it alot! I think the simplicity just added so much more feeling! It wasn't too choppy or plain. I thought it was something so beautiful that you don't need it to be a 200 word poem to be expressed. Great write and welcome to the site! Cant wait to see more of ur work
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by Ang | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is not too great in my eyes... but the poem is... in lack of other words Simple. I see that you love that person, but what would make it better is why you love that person.
    | Posted on 2004-10-14 00:00:00 | by destinedfallen | [ Reply to This ]
      "I hope that one day you'll come to realise,
    How perfect you are when seen through my eyes."

    I love this. It means so much in so little words. How wonderful relationships could be if you could see how you are seen through anothers eyes and vice versa. Nicely written.
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by kissingadict | [ Reply to This ]
      I've read all five selections listed and "Love" is a very over written subject when it comes to broken hearts. Everyone has been there, done that in every teenager ever born. However, one can still relate so that still makes the subject relevant. I have always pondered the idea of how lovers conquer this defeated feeling instead of letting it conquer them! Seldom do you read from that point of view, and that always intriqued me. Well, this was a very nicely written flow in all cases, so your potential as a writer just surprize many people, including you! Have a good time in your writing, see you later on the board.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]


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