Sign up to EliteSkills




Already have an account? Login to Roleplay.Cloud
Forgot password? Recover Password

The Melody Man[not so melodic]


Author: Damien Vladimir
ASL Info:    28/m/hollywood/Ca
Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 122 /89 /35
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
Total Views: 1272
Average Vote:    No vote yet.
Bytes: 477



Description:




The Melody Man[not so melodic]



I enslave misery with guitar strings
as i play, night and day,
notes of sing-song rhytmning
i maintain an amazing melody
a key cavalry,of key thundering
the retreat of metallic lightning

the extreme metal scene
is a timeless dream slip
the horizon expansion,
of riff, riffs,drifting

the magnetic force of alter ego-maniacs
brings about a vocal focus of enormous rage and fury trapped.




Submitted on 2004-10-15 13:49:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Edit post

Rate This Submission

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!




Comments



Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece?
7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?



28196