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    dots Submission Name: Just a little Faithdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 610
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       Ok though its miserable out and its been a long week, some how I find myself being upbeat today so I embraced it. And this came out


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    dotsJust a little Faithdots
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    I still believe


    Christopher Reeve can fly
    there are better days to come
    the sun will break through the clouds


    I still believe


    I am alive
    That theres work to be done
    Iím gonna make my mother proud


    Just a little faith
    And Im walking on
    Rain canít fall all the time


    Because I still believe


    Christopher Reeve can fly
    That Ive got work to be done
    The Sun will break though the clouds
    And Iíll make my mother proud

    Just a little faith
    And Im walking onÖ..




    Submitted on 2004-10-15 16:45:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mamma boy huh? Me to oh well. This is kinda sappy, but for the most part I like it. I think that you have work to do on this line "That Ive got work to be done" I doesn't flow well as result of the extra words. Hope this is helpful. peace
    | Posted on 2004-10-15 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      i was probably the last to find out that he died! i couldn't believe it. he was my favorite actor! well life moves on. it's a really good poem but something about it just doesn't flow right. i dunno. ^.^
    | Posted on 2004-10-15 00:00:00 | by Aroura | [ Reply to This ]
      your cute john
    this is pretty good
    kinda random
    not a typical you poem
    but i liked it... espically the part about making your mom proud
    it almost seems like its written from like a 5 year old perspective
    the only thing that didnt quite work was the line "that ive got work to be done" and the "that theres work to be done"
    grammar issues maybe...? or maybe i dont know
    <3 im glad your upbeat
    | Posted on 2004-10-16 00:00:00 | by scorpio sphinx | [ Reply to This ]


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