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Cats


Author: Timmy S. Edgar
ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263 /200 /71
Words: 60
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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i think Cats are wonderful as they are so independant and they love thier person unconditionally


Cats



Cats
I love Cats
Now that is that
They love you always
& Unconditionally

Sit on my lap
Good company to pat
Like an old faithful friend
Essentially

The best wisdom given
That’s that Cats are stress busters
Loving life extenders
Family members

I love them like another child
Cats




Submitted on 2004-03-06 14:17:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah i had a cat for years until i moved out. they are so great. always there to listen and keep you warm. purr with affection for you. such great family they are**
| Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  i feel that the line 'The best wisdom given
That’s that Cats are stress busters' is a very important part of the poem because it is reinforcing the statement of being stress busters and it is true mediacal trials here say that pets like dogs and cats do actually reduce blood pressure yet i appreciate your comments this one has to stay as is
| Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice poem.think taking out the "That's that" would even out your rhythm and fix the small structure problem... very nice poem and all true.
jan
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
  a bit of a tongue twister there with the repition in the 2nd line 3rd stanza... not bad work at all tho... keep it up
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
  lol i love cats and it was refreshing to read this..great work
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]
  this is coo man, mainly because i'm a big cat lover. I've had dozens of cats in my life time, in fact i wrote something for one of my cats, http://www.eliteskills.com/z.php?i=1553 check it out. see ya
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by dgnofdarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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