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Firecracker Kisses

Author: Lunablue
ASL Info:    24/F/LA
Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 94 /71 /10
Words: 378
Class/Type: Prose /Passion
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The real title is

"Canadian Coins and Firecracker Kisses"

I just updated it so check it out and let me know what you think.

but it wouldn't fit.

It's a true story.

Firecracker Kisses

I am engulfed in a sea of late-night tourists and last-minute shoppers.
Latte in hand, I search for your face.

I find you hiding your habit in an alley around the corner.
“Cancer kills,” I remind you with slight contempt.
"We have 3 minutes to be on the bus and a 15 minute walk,”
you say, changing the subject.

As we cross the bridge I try to imprint in my memory this night view.
The falls are dancing under brilliant colored lights,
like a liquidated rainbow suddenly gripped by gravity.
The stars are out and easily visible,
even despite the glowing strip of tourist attractions behind us.
The water is loud, crashing down and rolling beneath us.
For the first time this summer, the air is cool from northern current.
I cannot tell if that's why I have chill bumps.

I stop to fish the change out of my pocket.
"Won't need these anymore," I shrug and toss them over the railing.
The 8-second descent glitters the coins in chromatic light.
"Come on, we're already late," you remind impatiently.

All of a sudden,
you shove me up against the railing.
The only thing between me and a 200-foot fall is a piece of metal and your arms
You lean straight into my protesting eyes saying,
"I'm the only guy who's ever going to do this to you.”
Then you kiss me so hard I can smell your menthol nostrils.
My knees buckle and I drop the latte.
I feel like I'm falling
and I half expect to feel the plunge of icy water on my skin.

Then you lean back with a smirk on your face and declare,
"I kissed you in two countries at the same time."

My jaw drops as I turn around to read a plaque that says, "U.S./Canada Dividing Line."

I am thunderstruck, immobile, at a loss for words.
But fortunately fireworks begin to explode over Niagara, adding more bursts of color to the night sky.
It is like a kaleidoscope.
We don't pay much attention to them though, and we are definitely late to the bus.

Submitted on 2004-10-16 00:06:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I don't have love like that, and there are guys out there like this... so that's why I am depressed all the time, because yeah I snagged a good one... but not a romantic one...

| Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved captures you and makes you picture the scene and its very romantic and it prob makes ppl say man i wish i had a guy like that.
| Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by intoxicated411 | [ Reply to This ]
  so so so so so amazing, beautiful! i am speechless, seriously! this is a true story? amazing, just amazing. i am sorry, this is just too good...crazy! haha, ok, nice job...if this happened to you, you are a lucky woman...ok, keep in touch, rock on!
| Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by trmbngrl | [ Reply to This ]
  OMG! this is gorgeous! when i read the "I'm the only guy who's ever going to do this to you." i thought YOU WANKER! but then like... awwwww... it was so gorgeous! and yeah im reminded also of the walk to remember thingee though it was spontaneous and i swear i wanted to do the two countries at once thing first! haha! i gotta say this whole thing sounds amazingly magic and the fireworks... woah... how like the movies is that!? unreal! thats awesome! and very well told!
| Posted on 2004-10-17 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm really close to tears - i'm way too emotional for my age group. i love how there's directness and stark announcements of your actions and his actions, and it's all framed prettily by technicolor descriptions. and while yea, there was the scene from a walk to remember where she stood in 2 different states at once, somehow i'm more attracted to the way he did this; without warning, or a moment to be romantic about it. just a kind of smugness about the whole thing that takes my breath away. this is a 5 in my book and definitely a favorite. excellent, spectacular job, ma'am. =]

| Posted on 2004-10-16 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
  this is just beautiful. the images are sharp and very visual, i could see the falls with the rainbow dancing through it. i could smell the menthol of the cigarette. i loved the kissing in two countries. that was clever! very nice. i wanted to hear more, i was so engrossed with it.
| Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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