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    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1627



    Description:
       "Toothpaste Sandwiches and the Meaning of Life"


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    "it's better to burn out then to fade away..." -kurt cobain (spoken)

    v:
    Here is a story that has no ending
    Some hollow words with some useless meaning
    You know, we all look alike at first glance
    And thereís no such thing as second chances
    Youíd think Iíd learn over the years,
    Nothing matters, that nothing matters,
    Then what are we living for?

    c:
    Broken hope and the promise of tomorrow
    Will keep me going strong until it all crashes down again
    And these days nothing matters, then again,
    Nothing ever mattered did it?
    Show me the path to enlightenment
    The one made of blood and tears and freedom
    Show me something, give me something
    To believe in

    v:
    Donít hold onto me Ďcause Iím falling
    Donít hang onto me Ďcause Iím drowning
    [And I donít want to bring you down (with me)Ö]
    The stars explode from the sky,
    Endless questions, why?
    With razor blades and broken hearts
    And what it feels like to fall apart
    I swear by this madness, god, I swear (I swear)

    Cx1

    Bridge:

    Well if all else fails I guess Iíll close my eyes
    Itís not like I didnít see this coming
    Iím losing my faith, my confidence falters
    But itís nothing worth losing sleep over

    cx1

    .:the stuff in the parentheses and brackets I'm not sure about, I may take that stuff out. This is honestly just my first draft... hope you guys like it though :.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting title. I like it over all, and it would be cool to hear this sung with music. I'm sure that if you do change anything then you will make it even better.
    By the way, I like your screen name.
    - Delirium
    | Posted on 2004-10-16 00:00:00 | by Delirium | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked some parts of this. but I had a really hard time finding the rythym and flow in it. Some pieces easily draw this out and others don't. My suggestion would be to take the time to measure it out a little more. Maybe if i heard it played that would come out more.
    | Posted on 2004-10-17 00:00:00 | by littledifferent | [ Reply to This ]


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