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Memories of You


Author: Timmy S. Edgar
ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
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Words: 70
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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distance apart from your loved one tends to make the heart grow fonder ...certainly the case with me

i love you H.


Memories of You



To watch a sunrise
With fragrant aromas of love
With every look I see
You’re my angel, from heaven above

My sweet memories of you
Photographs etched in my mind
Your beauty, is so rare
Your love, is my find

To watch a sunset
And feel the evening coming on
It’s when I hold you in my arms
Genuine feelings, it’s here that you belong





Submitted on 2004-03-06 19:41:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is so romantic. you are such a good writer of love poetry. i have read some others already and have yet to comment on them. this is one of my favorites so far**
| Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  this is just beautiful. but i don't think you need the commas in the first two stanzas - i kind of trip over that
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree... etched would work a lot better in this write, as burnt tends to make one feel 'down' and it is usually used in unhappy writes to describe how something came to be in one's mind... very nice write altogether tho... keep it up
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
  it was short and sweet. You really know how to take a subject matter and make the best of it!
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the way you began witha sunrise, and ended with sunset...and in between you have those "Photographs"...it's ALL good isn't it. Lovely piece, Silver
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really swweet...wish it could be that way for everyone..great write
| Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]


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