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    dots Submission Name: Memories of Youdots
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    Author: Timmy S. Edgar
    ASL Info:    38 male Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 263/200/71
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1137
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    Bytes: 440



    Description:
       distance apart from your loved one tends to make the heart grow fonder ...certainly the case with me

    i love you H.


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    dotsMemories of Youdots
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    To watch a sunrise
    With fragrant aromas of love
    With every look I see
    Youíre my angel, from heaven above

    My sweet memories of you
    Photographs etched in my mind
    Your beauty, is so rare
    Your love, is my find

    To watch a sunset
    And feel the evening coming on
    Itís when I hold you in my arms
    Genuine feelings, itís here that you belong





    Submitted on 2004-03-06 19:41:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is so romantic. you are such a good writer of love poetry. i have read some others already and have yet to comment on them. this is one of my favorites so far**
    | Posted on 2004-12-13 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      this is just beautiful. but i don't think you need the commas in the first two stanzas - i kind of trip over that
    | Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree... etched would work a lot better in this write, as burnt tends to make one feel 'down' and it is usually used in unhappy writes to describe how something came to be in one's mind... very nice write altogether tho... keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      it was short and sweet. You really know how to take a subject matter and make the best of it!
    | Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you began witha sunrise, and ended with sunset...and in between you have those "Photographs"...it's ALL good isn't it. Lovely piece, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really swweet...wish it could be that way for everyone..great write
    | Posted on 2004-03-06 00:00:00 | by TastemyTears | [ Reply to This ]


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