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    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Only a vague memory of what we once had
    is all that I can remember

    Through the month of April
    I'd keep trying to remember,
    and with our relationship now in embers,
    May keeps withholding the memories of you

    She withholds you from my memory

    These months can't take into consideration
    my heartfelt meditation of you,
    only now it's been so long
    since we last belonged to each other,
    I don't think I'll ever remember you

    Only a few memories remain now.




    Submitted on 2004-10-17 14:42:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Time makes everything fade away. Even love eventually. It washes away until all you have left is a few faded pictures in your mind of what rapture was and a clear picture of what you live like now. Nice poem.
    | Posted on 2004-10-17 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      It'll get better. Not so soon maybe but eventually. I liked how you captured your pain in the beginning although I feel like it could've carried until the end. Good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-10-17 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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