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    dots Submission Name: Monochrome Devouring Colordots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMonochrome Devouring Colordots

    Winter is a delicate velour dream,
    the snow a languid skin
    covering the thick earth:
    white beneath a pale gray sky
    stark and beautiful,
    monochrome devouring color.
    Will nothingness overwhelm all
    and the world become a blank page?

    Submitted on 2004-03-07 03:01:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You like the winter don't you? It shows in your writing. I miss winter even more after reading your work. That's an okay thing, I'm just reminded of how beautiful it really is during that season.
    How I wish the world stayed monochrome forever, but, oh well.
    I love the line "stark and beautiful", it speaks volumes about the piece in general.
    | Posted on 2007-02-03 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      I've been searching about for your work, as I know you won't be posting. This I really like, the idea of monochrome devouring color just fits. I lived lakeside at one time, few of us were there all winter, as it was a summer resort area. The trees were bare and the lay of the land was gorgeous in the snow. Just hope the monochrome this year doesn't stay forever. You made me jealous when you said it doesn't get cold in South Carolina. I could go for that. What a shame it would be if the world became a blank page. Hugs, sweetness,
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      "delicate velour dream"... very pretty. It's interesting, how much you write about winter. You're from down south, right? This piece has a lovely little flow. Very charming. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-23 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like everything about this poem, it is short and sweet with good word choices, it is a shame that it doesnt snow down here in florida, i wish i could experience the snow.
    | Posted on 2004-03-08 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Another really good one...tell freak thta you don't like the gray world much yourself...just can't get rid of ot.
    | Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful images as always. here it's still winter and it has been snowing until an hour ago. it's nice but I want spring! anyway very well written. good one.
    | Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      monochrome has it's own charm... i just never thought of winter that way. i liked your perspective and this is a beautiful poem. i really liked the last line.
    | Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]

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