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    dots Submission Name: Scarcitydots
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    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 888
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    Scarcity:



    Look at me I am an angel,

    Oops look at him,

    He is out of a grave or what?

    Looks like a zombie,

    Why do gods create such creatures?

    Um why should I bother?

    I am an angel..!



    She looks like an angel,

    But she isnít any where near an angel,

    Poor girl, I made her think that I am after her,

    What can I do?

    May be make her feel as if she is angel,

    Oh no, that is what I did,

    What have I done?!

    I must have Ö.

    Oyo thatís Ö.ridiculous,

    Hey that is not so bad,

    After all, I made her feel

    I made her feel, like an angel.

    That is not so bad at all, she is not an angel

    Neither is I a zombie,

    She thinks so,

    I donít, she got oh boy,

    A scarcity,

    A scarcity of thought,

    Ha only an angel can help her.

    Who cares?

    There is no scarcity of angels..!

    Like her or many better than her..!



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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm... i guess this was extremely similar to the last one. Not bad, but a little too casual for my liking.
    | Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]
      Didn't feel alot of emotion in this one...needs some kinda descriptive devices in it.... jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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