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    dots Submission Name: Little Angelsdots
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    Author: TeddyD
    ASL Info:    44/M/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 83/121/28
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       ok-this is written to my kids 1st foster mom,(kids were taken from ex-wife) about six years ago. my kids ask me to read this to them often!
    I still have the tear soaked original...lol
    let me know what you think...thanks! TeddyD


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    dotsLittle Angelsdots
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    Please don't you take,
    My angel from me
    She's the sensitive one,
    The eldest of three

    So thankful you're there,
    But for me hard to see
    She's the most special one,
    Don't take her from me!

    Please don't you take,
    My angel from me
    The biggest of smiles,
    The second of three

    When we're being silly,
    She giggles with glee
    She's the most special one,
    Don't take her from me!

    Please don't you take,
    My little buddy from me
    He's a chip off the block,
    The youngest of three

    When his dad looks at him,
    It's like looking at me
    He's the most special one,
    Don't take him from me!

    All hearts can break open,
    It's so easy to see
    They're the tender young branches,
    Of my family tree

    I wish times were different,
    I know someday they'll be
    So please don't you take,
    My little angels from me!




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      I like this, simple and to the point. I myself have had two Angels in my life. I had a daughter that I got to hold in my hands for less than five minutes and I felt so much love in that span more than any other time in my life. She passed away a few minutes later and I never thought that I would feel the warmth of that moment again. Then another person came into my life, who was exactly like one of God's Angels. She filled my last few months with love, compassion, and understanding and dealing with a hard family and cancer she seemed to take my pain away. She even brought God back into my life. But then the Angel seemed to have up and left without notice and chaos and destruction is going everywhere and it seems to be out of my hands. Do you think that my Angel is still with me, or do our personal Angels leave when they think they have done their job? I was told his Angel would always be there no matter what, in the time of trauma, and death, but I look all around and I don't see her. What is your view on Angels?
    | Posted on 2005-01-30 00:00:00 | by wildcatchamps | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerfull... considering the context it would be inappropriate to suggest revisions imho. At least it sounds like your Angels have come home, and that is always a good thing.
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by harley3k | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks! at the time I wrote this, I only wrote when my guts were going to explode... and more or less wrote to keep my sanity... hey! I think it worked! lol sad to say my kids aren't home, but we're closer then ever! I'll get them home one day!
    thanks again!
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by TeddyD | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, your point really gets across. I think you used good vocabulary and the structure is good. The only thing I can say is I think some punctuation and capitalisation would have worked well. But great work, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by Star_searcher | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. the emotions in this made me cry. i again feel sorry that you had to go through something like this. but this is just an awesome piece of written art.
    | Posted on 2004-10-19 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work personal thought tough on the soul nice reading had me there standing with you to the end once again great imagery and fabulous topic
    sandman
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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