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    dots Submission Name: war and peacedots
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    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 946
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1681



    Description:
       I know the title sucks but what can ya do?

    inspired by a friend of mine and my own feelings on war...


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    dotswar and peacedots
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    v:
    He’s got a gun and wild eyes
    And there’s nothing here but the sound of silence
    And the rain keeps falling on this desert land
    A war torn country without a plan

    He’s got a gun and a razor blade
    And he’ll die tonight without a name
    And he’s found that innocence doesn’t mean a thing
    What’s it matter if we all end up the same?

    Prec:
    Pull the trigger and you’ll be okay

    c:
    What a self-righteous way to die
    Can’t you hear the angels singing?
    They’re coming now to take you home
    They’re gonna take what you’ve been missing
    Can we get some understanding?
    Can we get some sympathy?
    This soldiers gonna die tonight
    But no one can hear him scream

    v:
    He’s got a gun and a family
    And he’s got friends back in the USA
    And he’s got a conscience that won’t let him sleep
    Speak now or forever hold your peace

    Prec>c

    Bridge:

    v:
    He’s got a dad that has a gun
    And he wants to be like him when he grows up
    And he don’t know what tomorrow brings
    Child beware of when the blackbird sings

    c:
    Daddy died self-righteously
    Now he can hear the angels singing
    They’re coming now to take him home
    They’re gonna take what he’s been missing
    What’s so hard ‘bout understanding?
    What’s so hard ‘bout sympathy?
    This soldiers gonna die tonight
    But no one will hear him screaming
    No, no one can hear them screaming,
    No, no one, no one, no one…




    Submitted on 2004-10-18 20:04:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      whoa, intresting piece, this stirs way to emotions for me, and yet provides a safe feeling.. the imagery that started the piece out is what kept me reading, kept me wanting to find out what the rest is trying to say, trying to get the full message. excellent write!.. keeep it up
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      *tear* this was sad. i feel so bad for all the soliers overseas. yet they know what they signed up for, to defend the country, and they die for a reason. its sad to think about though. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-10-18 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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