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    dots Submission Name: If I Neverdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
    Total Views: 817
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 635



    Description:
       this is really just a piece of fluff that I just wrote while listening to Keep me in your heart by Warren Zevon of his last album before he died of cancer. What else can I say but Ive fallen for this girl and the romantic in me has a hold....so my writing is gonna take a nose dive for a while....I am horrible with happy stuff.... So dont be nice if you think this is fluff and cliché and silly tell me.


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    dotsIf I Neverdots
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    And if I never see your face again
    Never hold your hand
    Would you understand
    I didn’t want to leave you


    It’s real…
    Yes my…
    It’s real…


    But I must walk alone
    Though I may never smell your hair again
    Never taste your lips
    There is no other way my dear


    But it’s real…
    Yes my…
    Its real…


    And if one day my feet
    Carry me back to you
    Would you understand
    I never wanted to leave you

    Because its real
    Yes my love
    It’s real




    Submitted on 2004-10-19 14:18:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      NOT fluff and stuff...wanna read that go to my page...
    wow John, beautiful
    stilll sad you seem to have the same twisted soul of longing i do...but this...well it is wonderful.
    sorry not words of help or critique, in my eyes not needed.
    kelly
    | Posted on 2004-10-19 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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