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    dots Submission Name: My hidedots

    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsMy hidedots

    Having fun is just a way to play
    So what if you don't like it
    You don't need to stay
    Just go
    Run, and please do run fast
    and stroll as slow as you can
    Am playing with nothing
    can you feel it
    or are you in it
    You can hide and just not leave
    anything behind
    l don't mind
    Cause l am running
    and hiding from you
    lt is something
    l like to do
    play play play
    so there
    l said it
    What are you going to do
    then go
    but you won't find me
    l am behind
    an apple tree
    and it loves me

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      Very simple but very interesting one too, I really liked the last part that says "go, but you won't find me, l am behind an apple, tree and it loves me", Good effort.
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      This one made me grin. It is kind of cute and I dunno.. uplifting. The memories of playing
    games like this as a young child flood back to my mind. Joyous memories. Yet, sometimes it still feels like I'm playing this same game at this same moment. Hiding from friends.. hiding from parents.. hiding from people who try to find the me inside of me. Hiding.

    You've inspired me... the next poem I write might just be dedicated to you. Heh Heh.

    You did a great job on this, keep it up k?
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
      too funne, and far too silly, that's what makes this adorable, but please come out from the apple tree and play, enough hide and seek, I want a peek lmao, ...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]

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