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    dots Submission Name: School of Deathdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       i wasnt really thinking when i rote this so it may be a little out of order..


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    dotsSchool of Deathdots
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    Bang bang bang,
    those sounds ring in my ears
    what would have happened
    could have happened
    in my school

    Terrorised kids are now
    the terrorists
    guns and knifes are the ony things
    that hasnt betrayed them yet
    but soon will

    running through the halls of death
    seeing blood covered desks
    and walls decorated with bullet holes

    Welcome to the School of Death

    We welcome you with
    cold steel, and hot bullets

    Welcome...
    Welcome...




    Submitted on 2004-10-20 16:04:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh wow. Yes, Kera, definitely a female Eminem. You told me to read some of your other pieces to see if I still thought that, and I do. I wonder if you've heard "The Way I Am" when he says:
    "When a dude's gettin bullied and shoots up his school/And they blame it on Marilyn/And the heroine; where was the parents at?/Middle America; NOW it's a tragedy/NOW it's so sad to see/In an upper class city."
    This piece reminded me of that. I really liked this Kera. It needs to be read by more people, particularly those who have the power to stop teens from being tormented but ignorantly turn the other cheek. I'm adding it to my favorites. Thank you so much for writing this.
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Lady Tragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      this captures a lot that is going on in today's world with school shootings and whatnot. i think that you did a good job for not thinking. it depicts your emotions toward school shootings.
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      i felt a sort of chill go down my spine while reading this. It has a calm, eerie sense to it. I like it though. The last part especially had a freaky sound to it. The slight repetition goes really well with the rest. And I just think you did a great job on this. Keep it up, alright?
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, there is a strong sense of hate and anger in this peice, i like it because it shows exactly what some of todays youth is doing, i like your use of words and the way in which you painted the picture
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by dark silence | [ Reply to This ]
      that was disturbing to say the least. This is something out of a punk song. And as fukced as that may be, people would listen and abide by this poem... I dont know if that is a good thing, but it definetly makes it good literature...
    | Posted on 2004-10-20 00:00:00 | by B Adams | [ Reply to This ]


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