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    dots Submission Name: Questionabledots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsQuestionabledots
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    My innards want to come up and out
    But there's nothing there to come out here

    I'm not wanting to be
    I really hate me

    Why can't I settle?

    I'd like to stick the damn knife through
    But in morality logic that would interpret settling

    There in turn
    Nothing would grow
    And I'd settle




    Submitted on 2004-10-21 10:33:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      never settle, and never hate thyself, it's loveless, the mirror is the greatest tool in self help, just look past the reflection, and by your writing I can tell you've been doing alot of indepth reflecting, chin up, smile and have an awesome day...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't understand this, but it seems to be pretty well written. My favorite part was the bit about there being no innards TO come up and out. . . kinda like you're empty inside? You lost me after that but it's still good. I would work on the second stanza because it doesn't seem to flow that well, but other than that. . . a-yeah. Good write.
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Feels like the trailor park nighmare. It's just sitting there, waiting for you to claim it. Settle into it... This poem makes me want to send you a round-the-world ticket and hope your horizons change... It's well written and evokes something all too familier... Very good
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by ParaGridD | [ Reply to This ]


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