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    dots Submission Name: PaRAnOIAdots

    Author: monophobic
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere,someplace
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 70/88/32
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
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       I wrote this one night in my room after smoking pot....i was trying to write a poem and this was the result-but it doesn't really matter its not really something you gotta comment to, but you can if u want

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    Oh BoY iF mY mOM cOmEs oUt HeRe
    ShE'lL kNoW aNd I'Ll Be ScReWEd
    sHe AlWaYs SoMeHoW kNowS
    OmG WhAt TiMe Is IT?? aND WhErE dID i PuT tHaT foOd!!
    HeRE cOMeS mY lITtLE siSteR, I MuST NoT tAlK
    Oh No sHe LeFt, DiD sHE kNoW? ShE bEtTeR nOt TelL
    ShE's GoNnA tElL i KnOw It
    I'lL jUsT gO tO BeD, NO iTs ToO eArlY, ThEy'Ll KnOw
    tHeY aLwAyS kNoW!

    Submitted on 2004-10-21 16:56:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's like you can feel the tention. I liked it.. And since your still young I think the whole thing is cool..
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Laveina | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL. ya I've been there before, and if the thoughts were to take on literary form, thas what they;d look like I think. Honestly you stay paranoid unless a)your in a safe environment or b) you get used to it

    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      haha... this is brilliant... usually i am completely allergic to the uppercase/lowercase smoosh thing but it fully works in a paranoid, stoned kinda way... but too true... they always know... even when they dont know they do know... if you can follow that...
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sorry to say that this sounds too silly. It sounds like a child wrote it -no offence-. And what is with the partial caps, this is no 1337 forum...LOL
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by Beast | [ Reply to This ]
      ahah this is funny!!
    At first I thought it was about somethign bad.. like, I dunno.. that you murdered someone.. or .. something CRAZY like that.. but then I read your descripiton!! lol .. not many ppl write poems about this stuff, not necessarily a great sophisticated poem or what not, but it made me laugh!
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by Lova_Star | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very silly, something i can imagine after smoking some pot. 'cept the LeTeRS THiS way is a little hard to read! it's like i smoked a doobie or something ! lol! funny! i try to stay away from the wacky t'backy anymore, tho. it'll make you PaRanOId!
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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