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    dots Submission Name: Lingering Thoughtsdots
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    Author: Aken Sol
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 197/204/67
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsLingering Thoughtsdots
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    Temptation from the start
    Deprivation in my heart
    I don’t know why she’s his girl
    My mind is spinning in a whirl

    Of unchained thoughts and possibilities

    Mapped out desires that are too real
    Wrapped up feelings I shouldn’t feel
    For he has always been my friend
    More reason for me to defend

    This crazed hunger for rationalities

    He doesn’t treat her quite right
    She doesn’t seem that bright
    Receiving heartache and pain
    Disbelieving sunshine when it rains

    With angry blows and hostilities

    Vile is his treatment to this sweetie
    Bile is what he is to me
    Learnt not to appreciate this gift
    Burnt hot as my anger begins to shift

    Towards change with probable casualties

    Through idle eyes I stared
    Grew the silent protest I bared
    It seems as though fate is set
    Fit, as I try to forget

    These unchained thoughts and possibilities




    Submitted on 2004-10-21 18:09:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      oo.
    sticky situation.
    I actually really liked this write, because I can relate to it so much.
    Do you like this girl?
    Good luck with the whole situation.
    -Andrya
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by andrya | [ Reply to This ]


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