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    dots Submission Name: Sadness From Now 'Til Foreverdots

    Author: brain
    ASL Info:    28/m/Miami FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 27/37/12
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSadness From Now 'Til Foreverdots

    Sometimes I sit and remember how,
    when you and I would go out on the town
    and ride around, and just kick back
    with our friends, that you would every now
    and then, when we were parked, lean over
    and want to kiss,
    which I would want to too

    so we would.

    your lips, soaking wet, after I had slobbered
    all in your mouth, would give me reassurance
    that I was not alone and would never be,
    although since, you've gone away from me

    when that day does come finally, that I will die,
    like the rest of the world, and like you,
    then man I hope that I will again get to kiss you

    I love you.

    only now what more can I say, 'til then,
    I'll see you when my life meets the grave.

    Submitted on 2004-10-21 20:38:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a great write. The whole slobbered inside your mouth thing just kind of made me get a little bit grossed out. haha. I think more people need to do that more often. Just add something really gross sounding in the middle of a beautiful poem. well keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by FeelingAlive | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow a lot of emotion in that poem. It is great. Wonderful in fact. i hope to read more things from you.

    Ja ne
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]

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