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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 18
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Read
    or
    Yell
    Give
    Blue
    Inner
    vased

    Roy G. Biv

    "Colour'd, l am;
    within a rainbow."




    Submitted on 2004-10-22 09:02:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a minimalist acrostic taken to extremes. Not knowing who Roy G. Biv is makes it incomprehensible (or makes me daft), but the form is there and recognisable. I can also see wherre you drew the words from, but would have liked a bit more meat on the bone.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see (physics is worthy after all!) that you are trying to allude to the colours of the rainbow (Red Orange Yellow Green Blue Indigo Violet) but I cannot see exactly what you are saying or why. Altough pretty colours are no doubt interesting to play with, I agree with the previous comment in that this poem needs something more to be more than just a 'would-be-clever' phrase. Try writing about something.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Civilian | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, so Roy G. Biv is the acoronym that helps you remember the colors of the rainbow for all of those who don't know. I think more technically it's the colors of broken white light. Anyway I like exercises that test a format, this kind of reminds me of the one I did recently called Self Absorbed. I thought it was a little to minimalistic however, I think you could flesh it out.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by harley3k | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, Vibrant, I don't understand the statement, but I am not so vain as to admit it. I don't feel the need to challenge your work or assume you don't have something here. I just don't see it yet. I see the acrostic part, but the words you used, I am sure there is a reason you chose those, you could have used any words to form the acrostic. Anyway, see you round the boards. If people don't get this, well you are in good company. I don't think people are getting my last one either.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      aww...how cute! at first i really didnt get it but then i remembered the Roy G. Biv-it sounded so familiar. this is so little girlishly sweet...and your how old? no offense...its nice to see that you still can see through a childs point of view-this is just what i got out of it...i loved this...
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]


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