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    dots Submission Name: I heard a timer when I dieddots

    Author: morte
    ASL Info:    17/female/earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 430/348/55
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       we had to write a poem in creative writting class that was similar (same rhythm and general theme) to a famous poets...can anyone guess whose this was based off of?
    anyway any comments are greatly appreciated

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    dotsI heard a timer when I dieddots

    I heard a timer when I died
    Everything slipped away
    My dreams mixed with reality
    Part of me longs to stay

    Sunlight crept slowly to the bed
    But to warm me itís too late
    The sun can not save me from death
    I have chosen my own fate

    As darkness closes in Iím alone
    No family or a friendÖ
    Then somewhere I hear a timer ringing
    Bringing my time to an end

    Submitted on 2004-10-22 17:47:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Silverstein? Where the sidewalk ends is a fav, Seuis (SP?) is another fav. The cat in the hat is a really creepy book, try reading it like fifteen times in a row, outload. You'll get chill's. Head to toe chills. Watch the Grench backwords, sinc up Pour some Sugar on Me, it brings out the devil. We tried it last Christmas, grusome, just gruesome. They made a movie about it: Gigli.
    | Posted on 2005-08-13 00:00:00 | by Apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      hey!guess what i know who it is...it seems no one else does...it is...oh [censored]...what is her name! dam it...i forgot!... dickonson... right... what is her first name!?...oh well...anyways, this was really good. i like how you related the timer to your death. very creative. this is a whole lot better than mine...well, great work...again.!LOL
    | Posted on 2005-03-31 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I have no clue which famous poet this was based off of, since i honestly don't know about many famous poets. but I do know that this poem is really good. My favorite was the third line in the first stanza. This poem is original and each line drags you to the next. I liked it a lot. good job
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
      This left me speechless. The thought of death is a really powerful thing. And you made it beautiful. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by TheHUGE | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I have always wondered what it may feel like when someone is near death. I feel that you answered my thought. Maybe because I am not afraid of death, I wasn't chilled by the poem. But I felt calm, peaceful. Maybe it was because the person was in the bed, and I feel that dying in bed is a nice way to go. I don't know. I just know that this is an awesome poem. And I will add it to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Celina Chiscolm | [ Reply to This ]

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