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    dots Submission Name: An Invitationdots

    Author: brain
    ASL Info:    28/m/Miami FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 27/37/12
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAn Invitationdots

    Seeing you in the depths of what is not,
    you wallow, as the time of your demise
    finally lands upon your own head,
    when once you surmised that it would
    land on the heads of others
    at your unforgiving bloody evil hands,
    in your sinister hell of time endless

    Satan seeks to cast his commanding spell
    on a host of the heavenly angels,
    only by God will he prevail

    but I know the secret of film

    God spun wars on planet earth,
    and the Devil and I were adversaries
    in this time of unknowing hypnotism,
    made battles and confrontations appear
    inside the eyes and ears of the cubic prism

    I invite you into the land of sad paradise.

    Submitted on 2004-10-22 18:59:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Television and film often causes one to find themselves inside of the movie, moving alongside the main character, fighting battles with them and feeling their emotions. It is paradise, because we get to live out our fantasies in these cubic boxes. And it is sad, because can't we find anything better to do?

    Very insightful, I really liked it. Television is indeed hypnotic, beckoning you to believe in the things it shows you. The first two stanzas sound like a movie that's going on in the television that you are watching, as if you are in the movie yourself. The best part was "time endless". That is such a cool expression.

    The style in this piece is very unique. You did well with it. The first two stanzas confused me just a little on what you were trying to get at, but I love the last parts of it, and all in all, you did a great job. Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2004-11-17 00:00:00 | by eener | [ Reply to This ]
      I found this very interesting. Although I could not find a meaning. I found no emotion. If you would spare the time would you share the motivation behind this piece?
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by isaiahc4 | [ Reply to This ]
      i have to agreee- alot of descriptive words- but what were they describing?? Almost sounds like one of my cousins on one of their acid trips...imagination at its best...
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by nicegurlintx | [ Reply to This ]

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