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    dots Submission Name: The Daydots

    Author: Civilian
    ASL Info:    21/M/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    7.14 - 146/166/35
    Words: 26
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Read and comment as you will- this poem is admittedly quite abstract and can be interpretted in a number of ways. However I would expect most people to 'get' the most obvious theme.

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    dotsThe Daydots

    In grey veils the Day
    Draws herself, morose, to live
    In the ways she does.
    Her air, but faintly
    Silhouetted on the sky
    Looms gently larger.

    Submitted on 2004-10-22 21:33:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Abstract poetry has always appealed to me,I wrote one a few years ago called "Flexible".This was really interesting, the image that appeared to me was much like an abstract painting you would see in a doctor office,or such place like that.This was good, I don't see much wrong with it. I enjoyed this quite a bit.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by Winterbliss | [ Reply to This ]
      no your right. i don't understand it..maybe you could tell me the meaning behind it..i'd really like it if you did. i think it has something to with her dying, but i'm not sure..let me know if i'm right.

    Ja ne
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummm not quiet- 'The Day' is a metaphor I've made for fate and the future...so she is in 'grey veils' (vague and hidden from sight). I can see where you are coming from with the dying thing, but I suppose that's the problem with abstract poetry.
    | Posted on 2004-10-22 00:00:00 | by Civilian | [ Reply to This ]

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