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    dots Submission Name: autumn strolldots
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    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    24/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.26 - 574/377/69
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 1058
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       this past thursday evening.

    it seems like favorite writing always comes from experience! I like it that way, I guess.


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    dotsautumn strolldots
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    Gray mist
    swirls in the air,
    settles on my eyelashes
    and smudges my world,
    hazily distorts all things
    surrounding me.

    and us.

    Hands entwined,
    making our way across
    a picturesque autumn campus,
    in-step and in-sync.
    Smiles radiate
    and mirror the shine
    in your eyes.

    and mine, also.

    Breathe deep,
    sweet.
    Take in the scent of my hair,
    the curve of me
    pressing against you.
    Puppy love,
    adoration but not too many
    promises.

    You make me forget me,
    and I like that.




    Submitted on 2004-10-23 14:07:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      its sad when in a state of being flourished with self-proclaimed love, we often, rather most of the time, get cheated on, get double-crossed, get frappuccino'ed! but when we look back at those moments, those good times, sometimes we think that its just worth it, i got THAt idea, was that the idea?
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by serpentarius | [ Reply to This ]
      even if it wasnt the idea, i liked the way you frankly told us what happened, with a twist of words. cool words meet frankness. good job either way
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by serpentarius | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this, simple and sweet... strolling through the beautiful autumn with your "puppy love." i adore the autumn. it is my "season of passion," so this hit home for me. well done!
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      wow it seems like you really love this guy and im very happy for you and i wish i could say that i still relate to this poem even though i dont you did a great job writing it and keep up the work
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      Take the scent of my hair
    the curve of me
    pressing against you.

    You do have a natural flow...so beautiful.
    I love the way you see the world and show it to us.

    Puppy love huh?...hmm
    no wonder I like it so...happy you forget too..
    beauty in it self when that happends.

    Can feel your curious wonder in this one, comes through loud and clear.
    So gald I'm watching you...smiles

    Kelly

    oh yeah...I like it and would not change a thing!
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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