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    dots Submission Name: Dependency Crutchesdots
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    Author: winged_writer_robyn
    ASL Info:    16/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 116/162/44
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 913
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    Description:
       as you may have guessed, i hurt myself. i was dancing and i popped my kneecap way out of place and a sprained a tendon. GREAT. homecoming is tonight (oct. 22, 2004) and guess who cant go? doug says he isnt bummed cause he has a way of making it up. guess what? he came to my house at 2 o'clock this morning just to bring me get well roses. aw. anyway, this is about the resentment of my crutches.


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    dotsDependency Crutchesdots
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    The metal beams
    glare at me;
    Ice cold silver
    reflects my resentment
    to what is holding me back...
    ...I can't dance,
    .......I can't play,
    ........Hell, I can barely WALK
    without the assistance
    of these stupid, friggin' crutches!

    If only I had listened
    when Mom told me to hem the cuffs of my pants
    so I wouldn't trip;
    If only I didn't twirl on the cement floor
    in my socks and slip;
    If only I was smart enough to balance and lucky enough to have the graceful gene passed on to me...oh, wait, that gene never existed...
    Well, if only I had been SMART
    I wouldn't have this friggin' brace on my leg,
    which, by the way, itches more than any wool sweater,
    and I would have to be dependent
    on these friggin' metal bars
    that hold me back!




    Submitted on 2004-10-23 14:10:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I just broke my wrist & I know how you feel and the if you could just go back and change the one second that screwed it all up. I get my pins out next week so here's to a speedy recovery for you! Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      if only... what a bummer! i had a cast on my leg for six weeks and had to walk on crutches. what a pain in the armpits! i laughed at the part about your mom telling you to hem your pants! sounds like my mom! i enjoyed this little vent but am sorry for your discomfort! hope it doesn't last too long! and hem those pants, lady! (where are you in Washington? i'm in Olympia.)
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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