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Dependency Crutches

Author: winged_writer_robyn
ASL Info:    16/f/wa
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Words: 142
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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as you may have guessed, i hurt myself. i was dancing and i popped my kneecap way out of place and a sprained a tendon. GREAT. homecoming is tonight (oct. 22, 2004) and guess who cant go? doug says he isnt bummed cause he has a way of making it up. guess what? he came to my house at 2 o'clock this morning just to bring me get well roses. aw. anyway, this is about the resentment of my crutches.

Dependency Crutches

The metal beams
glare at me;
Ice cold silver
reflects my resentment
to what is holding me back...
...I can't dance,
.......I can't play,
........Hell, I can barely WALK
without the assistance
of these stupid, friggin' crutches!

If only I had listened
when Mom told me to hem the cuffs of my pants
so I wouldn't trip;
If only I didn't twirl on the cement floor
in my socks and slip;
If only I was smart enough to balance and lucky enough to have the graceful gene passed on to me...oh, wait, that gene never existed...
Well, if only I had been SMART
I wouldn't have this friggin' brace on my leg,
which, by the way, itches more than any wool sweater,
and I would have to be dependent
on these friggin' metal bars
that hold me back!

Submitted on 2004-10-23 14:10:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I just broke my wrist & I know how you feel and the if you could just go back and change the one second that screwed it all up. I get my pins out next week so here's to a speedy recovery for you! Love, Peace, Joy!
| Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  if only... what a bummer! i had a cast on my leg for six weeks and had to walk on crutches. what a pain in the armpits! i laughed at the part about your mom telling you to hem your pants! sounds like my mom! i enjoyed this little vent but am sorry for your discomfort! hope it doesn't last too long! and hem those pants, lady! (where are you in Washington? i'm in Olympia.)
| Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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