Nice, sweet, short and simple...but you definitely got your point across. It was a nice write...I don't think you have to make it any longer...sometimes short poems speak millions of words which in themselves allow the reader to relate to the message. Nice write!
rolling stones. they were good..emphasis on were(sorry i'm sleepy..can't get my thoughts straight). I like the right to the point of this and while it IS dark/depressing it's not whiny like which is good:) it's just naked and in your face. and i like it.
The basic, raw text gets the poitn across so fast and i have to say if kind of reminds me of Vanessa Carlton's song "paint it black" i dont kno if she had that song remade or wahtever, but you've managed to capture the point off the song in 4 lines...short, sweet, to the point, and yet not...*woe is me* kind of deal, i approve... ~!~catie o daniels
the world works amazingly better through sleeping pills i must say... this is so short, stark and naked and yet its so deep... says so much... colour me anything but what i am... but then... if i was a thorn in the worlds side (which infact i am) i wouldnt give that up for nothing... unconventional is the way to go... i firmly believe that! i really appreciate how your stuff aint woe is me im so hard done by whingy whiney kinda like... thank you! its great to read stuff that can say something without sounding like a baby... still i maintain you are awesome! worship you!
Yeah, the title made me think of Mick and the boys too. I like the miniminalism here. I've been prescribed my share of sleeping pills, but they rarely make me sleep. Anyway, I feel this way too. It seems like the whole world smiles when I'm frowning.