Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: paint it black?dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Abby Sinthetic
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 177/230/53
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 1056
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 106



    Description:
       I think I was on sleeping pills......


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotspaint it black?dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Color me anything
    but what I am
    A morbid sting
    in this so conventional world




    Submitted on 2004-10-23 16:06:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Nice, sweet, short and simple...but you definitely got your point across. It was a nice write...I don't think you have to make it any longer...sometimes short poems speak millions of words which in themselves allow the reader to relate to the message. Nice write!


    *Toxic*
    | Posted on 2006-04-16 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      rolling stones. they were good..emphasis on were(sorry i'm sleepy..can't get my thoughts straight). I like the right to the point of this and while it IS dark/depressing it's not whiny like which is good:) it's just naked and in your face. and i like it.
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      The basic, raw text gets the poitn across so fast and i have to say if kind of reminds me of Vanessa Carlton's song "paint it black" i dont kno if she had that song remade or wahtever, but you've managed to capture the point off the song in 4 lines...short, sweet, to the point, and yet not...*woe is me* kind of deal, i approve...
    ~!~catie o daniels
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]
      the world works amazingly better through sleeping pills i must say... this is so short, stark and naked and yet its so deep... says so much...
    colour me anything but what i am... but then... if i was a thorn in the worlds side (which infact i am) i wouldnt give that up for nothing... unconventional is the way to go... i firmly believe that! i really appreciate how your stuff aint woe is me im so hard done by whingy whiney kinda like... thank you! its great to read stuff that can say something without sounding like a baby... still i maintain you are awesome! worship you!
    | Posted on 2004-11-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, the title made me think of Mick and the boys too. I like the miniminalism here. I've been prescribed my share of sleeping pills, but they rarely make me sleep. Anyway, I feel this way too. It seems like the whole world smiles when I'm frowning.
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    29216

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry