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    dots Submission Name: High School Aftermathdots
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    Author: eener
    ASL Info:    21/f/wi
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 351/370/53
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
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       Inspired by "Do you Know?" by Killradio.
    Dedicated to my childhood acquaintances.


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    dotsHigh School Aftermathdots
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    now and IN THE past
    you have always laughed last
    not caring about the END
    your cruel taunting might send

    I bet you WILL forever think
    my soul can still BE forced to sink
    SURROUNDED BY your ignorant hatred
    but you can't kill a LOVE for life so sacred

    why does all this bitterness AND pain
    YOU created within me still remain
    when WILL these wounds cease to reside
    since you and i NO LONGER coincide

    one day i will find some way
    to drive these evil feelings away
    you will STAND alone with your insecurity
    while i rise ABOVE with my mental maturity




    Submitted on 2004-10-23 17:16:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes! Terrific poem, something to scrawl on the yearbooks of the people you hated (or hated you) throughout the four years of embarassment and torture. Love it love it love it. Am adding to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2005-01-02 00:00:00 | by Lady Tragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG THAT WAS SO GREAT!!!!
    I can relate to this poem totally. I had all these people in my past (Though for me this was grade school) They would treat me like [censored] and say I was stupid and blah blah blah. I didn't talk much because I had a lisp, and people would laugh and so everyone thought I was stupid. Like when it came time for out loud reading time I would say that I couldn't read just so they couldn't laugh at my voice the whole time.
    But now it's different. Irealize that they are the stupid ones, they are the bad ones for they made fun of someone to make themselves feel better. It wasn't that they really deep down thought those things asmuch as they acted like they did, but they didn't like themselves so they had to make someone else feel lower then them.
    Good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great renee.
    I can respect the "capitalizing of certain words". it's a cool way to spice up the "four line stanza style"
    however, I feel that it detracts from the poem, because it distracts the reader.
    this is just my opinion. You don't have to change it.
    of course you knew that anyway.

    the content of this is tight. (good)
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      as a student currently in high school, i cant get the whole gist of it, since i'm an itty bitty freshman, but i did enjoy reading it...it is difficult to let go those grudges that once seemed to control you're life though but what i really enjoyed was ALL THE CAPITOLS spelling it out for you, the whole message of the poem is there, dead in the face and i love the bluntness of it! keep writing!
    ~!~Catie O Daniels
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by Catie O Daniels | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhh I like it. Messages within a message in a poem are my specialty, and I really liked the way you put it into this piece. This is an awesome and all too true write.... People at the time are stupid and immature, and its great to see you're smart enough to realize how stupid they actually are and be able to understand and live with it:O) Kudos to you and excellent write.
    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]


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