Description: this isn't exactly an event that happened to me but take it in a broader view and it makes sense.
Let It End -------------------------------------------
So where was all the blood?
it use to be all over the floor
It was a crazy night
And there like always was no moonlight
Yet we sat there and paced every
Once in awhile
Shouting and screaming
Nothing more then anything important
The shouts echo through my mind
like there is nothing in my head
To drown out the noise
Just like thereís nothing to drown out the pain
So as we lay here broken and sorry
And asking ourselves
What is the meaning of this?
We like always decide that it must mean that we
Got to give up and move on
Why? I may ask does our pain always result in more pain
Canít it ever go uphill
But the hill is so icy now
That every step I make just makes me slip further
Thereís never a bottom that what hurts the most
I rather fall flat on my face then keep falling
Thereís no end
But there was a beginning
Everything needs to end
But it never does
Itís the knot that will never be untied
We use to whisper sweet nothings
And now we scream sour everythings
Let it end
Just let it end
i liked ur poem, awww makez u kinda sad, lik i kno itz hard telllin a loved one, that itz da end. Itz Over. I kno how hard it iz to do that. I really lik the way u had the verses rhyme, then u kinda changed it to lik a person confrontin each otha. Dat waz ill, we coo.
I think that you message is hindered by all the extra words. I felt as if i was tripping over htem trying to cross a room. I think that this piece has potetial. You could make these lines so much stronger by eliminating a few words from many of the lines. I would also reconsider the line break up if only for this program. peace
Wow. This flowed very easy. Now I'M intimidated. *shakes* ;o) I like this a lot. It's how I feel sometimes, you should know after our talk last night. This is awesome STP, I'm serious. I like this one a lot.