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    dots Submission Name: For Only Yourselfdots
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    Author: kjb
    ASL Info:    21/male/NY
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 256/351/64
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Prose/Friendship
    Total Views: 380
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1233



    Description:
       betrayal hurts, so hard to trust people these days.


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    dotsFor Only Yourselfdots
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    Betrayal
    The knife once again firmly implanted into my back
    Didn’t even give me a chance to live
    It is on my left side
    Where my heart is
    You could just take it out
    And let me bleed
    It would be a more dramatic death
    No you have to leave it there
    Through my shoulder blade
    Don’t give me the benefit of a doubt this time
    I won’t buy it
    You meant this
    For only yourself
    So do me a favor and let me die alone
    Because to die seeing your face last
    Will send me way to far down below
    I know it was for yourself
    You would do anything to make yourself happy
    Leave me behind
    Let me turn to dust
    Since when did you look out for me?
    Was it all a fake?
    What did you gain?
    I don’t know but it sure does hurt
    You could hurt me
    Anytime
    I would understand if it was for my
    Good
    Or for anyone elses
    But you destroyed everything with your gain
    Pride comes before a fall
    When you fall
    I will not mock you
    For friends do not do that
    But I will give you the pain I felt
    When you put that knife in my back




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      this is very good, you show a lot of pain and its very sad i have been in similar situtations like this and i know how you feel, i liked it a lot and i hope you continue to write
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece seems to reveal alot of pain and deceipt..good way to vent- the flow threw me off a lil - but i am sure in a ranting state i would throw others off as well...hope that this pain is subsiding for you and allowing joy to flow where it was...
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by nicegurlintx | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Pain. Emotion. *Tear* I wanna know who did this to you so I can ... yell at them. You really went deep in this one. The lines:

    But you destroyed everything with your gain
    Pride comes before a fall
    When you fall
    I will not mock you
    For friends do not do that
    But I will give you the pain I felt
    When you put that knife in my back

    Wowsers. *smattering of applause* for my STP
    | Posted on 2004-10-23 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]



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