Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: because I just do...dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Scribbles1338
    ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169/167/37
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 919



    Description:
       This is how I feel:


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsbecause I just do...dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Do not ask me why I am in love with you
    Because I can assure you that no answer
    Will be the least bit satisfying
    I could tell you that I adore your funny little smile
    The way you look at me and tell me love me
    And actually just the way you look at me
    I love it when you whisper in my ear
    And every kiss is so soft and sweet
    I love the way your heart feels
    Pressed thumping against my chest
    And the big warm hugs that feel amazing
    I could tell you that you’re smart
    And cute and funny and sweet
    I could tell you that there is no real explanation
    But I somehow doubt that you’ll understand
    Things like that always confuse you
    And I find your confused moments adoreable
    I love the way that I’m in love with you
    Because you’re an amazing person
    And because you love me too





    Submitted on 2004-10-24 00:54:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      i really liked this i can also definetly realte to it as well, it seems like true love to me. you also managed to describe the undescribable if that even makes sense like then you said hes asked you why you love him, i know that i can't explain to my boyfriend perfectly on why i love him, but your writing is very good keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww. This is so sweet. A true love poem! I wish I could find love like this. All I can say is hold onto it and don't let it get away from you!
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      really sweet write, glad I came to read it. You've done a fine job with images, I can feel them and I can't imagine who wouldn't. I think you've captured a portrait of intimacy, very fine! Glad you're in love,
    thanks for sharing. nansofast
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      awwll so romantic. hmmm this is a good poem for valenine's and stuff like that. i think your style is distinct coz i cannot come to write such a simple straight to the point love poem. this is good. keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
      first up... i think you forgot a 'you' in the 5th line of this... but now that i said that and dont have to remember to not forget to say it...
    this is such a gorgeous write... ive written a poem like this before... in an attempt to tell this boy why i loved him and well... i didnt get anywhere at all... nothing really does anything justice does it...? i mean you dont wanna use the trashy trite clichés but findin your own words is damn near impossible... this is completely adorable and im very happy for you! i hope everything goes well for you!
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone else has said everything that i wanted to.. so i just thought id leave a simple 'ditto' :) and im sure she was blown away by it whoever she is ..
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    29280

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Linger written by saartha
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Incubus written by monad
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Giving written by jjd
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    To written by SavedDragon
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry