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because I just do...


Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 161
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is how I feel:


because I just do...



Do not ask me why I am in love with you
Because I can assure you that no answer
Will be the least bit satisfying
I could tell you that I adore your funny little smile
The way you look at me and tell me love me
And actually just the way you look at me
I love it when you whisper in my ear
And every kiss is so soft and sweet
I love the way your heart feels
Pressed thumping against my chest
And the big warm hugs that feel amazing
I could tell you that you’re smart
And cute and funny and sweet
I could tell you that there is no real explanation
But I somehow doubt that you’ll understand
Things like that always confuse you
And I find your confused moments adoreable
I love the way that I’m in love with you
Because you’re an amazing person
And because you love me too





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  i really liked this i can also definetly realte to it as well, it seems like true love to me. you also managed to describe the undescribable if that even makes sense like then you said hes asked you why you love him, i know that i can't explain to my boyfriend perfectly on why i love him, but your writing is very good keep up the good work
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww. This is so sweet. A true love poem! I wish I could find love like this. All I can say is hold onto it and don't let it get away from you!
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
  really sweet write, glad I came to read it. You've done a fine job with images, I can feel them and I can't imagine who wouldn't. I think you've captured a portrait of intimacy, very fine! Glad you're in love,
thanks for sharing. nansofast
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  awwll so romantic. hmmm this is a good poem for valenine's and stuff like that. i think your style is distinct coz i cannot come to write such a simple straight to the point love poem. this is good. keep it up
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
  first up... i think you forgot a 'you' in the 5th line of this... but now that i said that and dont have to remember to not forget to say it...
this is such a gorgeous write... ive written a poem like this before... in an attempt to tell this boy why i loved him and well... i didnt get anywhere at all... nothing really does anything justice does it...? i mean you dont wanna use the trashy trite clichés but findin your own words is damn near impossible... this is completely adorable and im very happy for you! i hope everything goes well for you!
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  Everyone else has said everything that i wanted to.. so i just thought id leave a simple 'ditto' :) and im sure she was blown away by it whoever she is ..
| Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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