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    dots Submission Name: Shadowdots
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    Author: Jesimine
    ASL Info:    19/female/australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 64/96/20
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1178



    Description:
       something here that i would like to have answered but feel free to leave any comment at all.


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    I see you there, as a shadow, standing at the foot of my bed. I know that you are not real but i can feel your presence. I know why you are here, you are here to take me. To hold me in your arms and take me far away from here. You know exactly what it is i need, i need your embrace. i need you to comfort me for i am alone without you. i need you to hold me and tell me everything will be fine. i need you to want me and you do. you take me into your embrace and you lay death's kiss upon my bitter lips. you move your hands upon my body and they stop upon my naked breast. you hold me closer and i can feel your heart beat racing. or is it my heart beat? my heart is racing and i know you feel it. i feel your lips upon my neck and your teeth slightly brush it as you prepare to fulfill my dreams. a gasp escapes my lips as your teeth plung deep into my skin. i feel the blood rushing from my body as you take it into yours. i can hear voices in my mind telling me it is wrong but i know it is right. My love flows deeply for you as does my blood. will you take it all and leave me dying or will you make me what you are and have me for eternity..... the choice is yours.




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      wow I really liked this one...sensual just enough and it really reminds me of vampires...I have to say I have a bit of an obsession about them...but the words you use must refer to one...or at least it seems so to me...anyways I really like it!

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    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by Ligeia83 | [ Reply to This ]
      As I read through this I was expecting to come across a big question that needed answering but I didn't find one. The only question you ask in the write does not really need answering.

    Aside from that, I can relate what you have described here, you feel everything but they seem like a shadow, deprived of emotions, its a great idea in my opinion and one I utilised a while back in my piece entitled "Shadow" but it does not follow the same dark path that this write seems to take. The image you created was a good one and I think you got your feelings across well.
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      do you dream of count dracula sweeping you off your feet, strange, at 19 one would thing prince charming would be the selection, but on a literary scale this was very nicely done, and I enjoyed the passion, and the yearning for love, nicely done...Bob:)
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]



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