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    dots Submission Name: Seasonsdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Just a rainy-day poem

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    Autumnal Season Rain
    washes away dirt
    not pain
    Trees change color too
    rebirth yet not
    for you
    For clouds of depression
    float on by
    yet leave an impression
    When is my season of new
    I'm tired & weary
    what should I do?

    Submitted on 2004-10-24 13:32:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it alot, the poem really flows and you captured feelings with seasons and you picture the images you are describing good job and keep it up !
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow i really liked this. It had so much good imagery in such a short poem! I love how you associated feeligns with the changing seasons. Really good!
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Elegy | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, it's a unique idea. Most writers do not express feelings in a way like this and I think you have done a good job. I thikn the structure could be improved but other than that keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, im star_searcher i just wanted to let u know that last comment was left by me. its just that my account has been messed up lately! anyway, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by Star_searcher | [ Reply to This ]

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