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    dots Submission Name: Memorydots
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    Author: max
    ASL Info:    27 m tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 152/191/55
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMemorydots
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    You could probably never kill the silence
    of her lonely name.
    In a deep sleep I see her face,
    and all my life I've promised
    that I would write it down, a description of her face--

    When the time came,
    I blew a kiss into the wind and prayed
    that time and God would forgive me.


    Through these days in this life of mine
    I've been reminded of her in my dreams
    when I sleep.

    Never a nightmare to see,
    just her.
    Nothing she could ever do to me would hurt,
    nothing she would ever do to me would hurt,
    nothing that she would ever say of me
    could burn my heart,
    nothing can come between these two hearts--
    hers and mine.

    She had red hair.





    Submitted on 2004-10-25 01:40:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow that's a really cool piece you wrote. Its kind of haunting...i love the red hair part. that just makes the piece. its the details that really count in writing. for some reason it makes me think of a dashboard confessional song screaming infidelities where the chris's gf dumped him but her red hair was left everywhere in his car. lol sorry that was random. just made me think of that. keep up the good writes!
    <3kar
    | Posted on 2004-11-14 00:00:00 | by summerskiss | [ Reply to This ]
      scary and awesome in a regretfull tone. so I take this as painting a clear picture of regret and what might have been but will never be now. Or what was once and is now lost.

    and she had red hair.

    cool

    peace,
    fizzle
    | Posted on 2004-10-25 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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